I recently started trying to create a parser game, and it’s my first attempt at this since I was a kid. I figured it would be a good idea to write up a mock game transcript before I started in on any coding. There isn’t much so far, just a few really rough drafts of room descriptions and journal entries, basically just starting to block out what might be in the space and trying to refine an image of things in my own head.
Unfortunately, I made the mistake of letting someone else see it. As I said, this is not a phenomenal example of writing yet. It’s serviceable at best so I was expecting a not so great critique. What I did not expect was him telling me that I have no idea what narration is. That’s a pretty upsetting comment which he wasn’t able to explain in any coherent way, and it’s left me feeling very uncertain. I don’t know if he’s clueless or if I’m clueless. He has played IF before so I would think he’d know what it should look like. I had been free-writing and working on this in some way pretty much non-stop the last few days, but since he said that all I can seem to do is stare at a blank screen panicking and unable to type a single word.
Is there someone who would be willing to take a quick look at what I have and tell me whether he’s right? If there is something fundamentally flawed in what I’m doing then I need to know now before I write an entire game like that.