hlship
(Howard M. Lewis Ship)
1
> i
You have a briefcase. You're not wearing anything.
This could be phrased better, You wear nothing unusual. perhaps. It currently makes the character sound like a nudist, rather than an MI-5 agent.
Better yet, if the text instead called out to a predicate the could be overridden.
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lft
(Linus Åkesson)
2
Good point. I’ll figure out a better default.
HanonO
(Hanon Ondricek)
3
That’s like…the logline for Cannery Vale.
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hlship
(Howard M. Lewis Ship)
4
I don’t get the reference.
HanonO
(Hanon Ondricek)
5
One of the plot elements of Cannery Vale involves repeatedly waking up naked on the beach with no memory and nothing but a briefcase to carry around.