Thank you everyone for participating in this festival of creativity. You are cherished as you are encountered. I will be posting reviews, because I’m stubborn and you can’t stop me. All reviews will include every possible spoiler I can jam into wordjars, because I’m stubborn and you can’t stop me. Thank you. I appreciate you.
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Radiance Inviolate by DemonApologist
Bram Stoker hits you with the hard sell on this hallucinatory Gothic extravaganza haunted by nightmare revenants of aristocracy undead, you’re reeled in like absolutely yes Dracula’s crawling on the wall like a salamander that’s awesome I love salamanders, then Stoker switches to his real focus, gadget bros breathlessly pledging to each other their sacred honor until their secretary does three seconds of work and goes guys you solved the mystery ages ago, they pause, gaze longingly at each other, I guess this means we must go into battle, to which the other is like, I pledge unto you my sacred honor that I shall fight by your side until death do us part, or persist indefinitely, depending on the whole, you know, vampire thing.
So we’re right on beat with a vampire named Lysander who “so longed to feel that fleeting warmth again. To drink deeply. To quicken his idle heart and bring color to stiff fingertips.” Par for contemporary aesthetics, we’ve flipped the moral matrix of the Victorian reference, softening the vampire by assuring readers that Lysander is primarily focused on “a drive to consume those already craving relief from suffering. / Acts of mercy that fueled him” and hardening his foes into brutal inquisitors, a litany of “Paladins and fiend-flayers and their growing hordes of frothing zealots” who “punished ever more obscure sins.” A refugee of church intolerance, Lysander is possessed of the “moral clarity” that eludes the wasteful hunters from whom he hides. Our vampire is merely misunderstood, in need of a little mercy; in a mood crumbling exuberance, Lysander even recalls his gig as a Ratatouille for the village cheesemonger: “At his most embraced, he worked as an affineur, attuning his supernatural sense of smell to divine the status of ripening cheese in exchange for safety from sunlight in the cellar, and regular access to blood.” Perhaps he’d be a better fit for the other side of the charcuterie board.
Don’t worry, though, a couple cackles from the organ can rescue the mood, from “Their nuptial bonfire lapped at the darkening sky” to “The heady scent had only grown, sublime iron gathering at the back of his throat.” As any good vampire knows, you can make up for so many sins with a sexy line: “Shall we scandalize the fireflies?” Alas, our trysts are always preempted by the Chaperones of Radiance Inviolate…
Wise to the creeping thinness of genre, there’s only so many times you can mention the moon, Radiance Inviolate holds together best when it travels swiftly from Neck A to Neck B, flittering through the flashback from mundane to the startling quickshift of tragedy, captured here charringly from the sobering distancing of others in “the opportune lover had vanished. What remained was a noble calculating an expedient solution for an inconvenient problem” to the abandonment in situation that surprises you when you are no longer a part of it: “The stream and its rocks. / The fireflies and the half-lit moon, too. / All of them proved indifferent to his suffering.” Where the precision evocation stumbles, like in this unsubtle unsubtlety, “Rene had rather unsubtly asked to be shown, “The cask from which poured nectar of such sweetness,” as he had so ostentatiously put it”, we recover immediately into the next pulse to tempo, caught in the clasp of a little lyric pull: “Through this cleft flowed sweet glows of green and gold whose heat took hold.” Glitches in our emanation engine indicate one too occasional trances under the genre allure, recapitulations of the obvious whyness sidetracking a reader who really would rather snap out of it to seek the next sensation. Take this meanderment, from which any inspired hunter would rescue the resonant second sentence: “In light of their relentless campaign to bring all accursed beings to face the sun’s vengeful brilliance, his caution amounted to nothing. The dorries were many, mighty, and meticulous in their takeover. They’d made it harder and harder for him to cross back into the city, withering his connections with the meager few who still cared for him. They’d made targets of anyone lending protection or support or sustenance. Vigilante smiting had intensified his fear, making him afraid to seek blood.” I rather suppose they hope so.
Still, as any up to no good demon knows, you can relish so many sins with a sexy line. Starting in Chapter IV, the story wobbles a little weird to the reader’s relief, carving some inventive mythifications of vampire tropes to sprinkle in room for grandiose gestures like “And what a beautiful thing it is, a fig, made delectable by the wasp that gave herself to its pollination, crawling inside to spread her brood.” And as much darkness and stars and sun and moon as we stargaze, genres transfixtures with our relentless lust for what once was more wondrously: “Death approached from above. / Her face sublime darkness he could not gaze into. / Her hair blue-bright fire that seared red streaks across sickled eyes. / Her vestments gossamer shawls whose edges wisped into smoke. Quicksilver pooled at his fingertips, braiding stars into her wrappings. / She bowed, unspooling tendrils of light that streamed all around him. / Uncanny faces writhed unfabric.” What else can you ask for? You chose to read a story about a vampire named Lysander. How bewitching.
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Wayfarers by Gina Isabel Rodriguez
The tone of Wayfarers, shall we say, jostles. It leads with war never changes graveliness, dumps into shockshallow war trauma, jumps to gamey zaniness, swerves to zonked zoomer memery, amps up to political polyangst, drops out into churning sincerity despair, then cybernetically accelerates the entire array into medicocosmic nihilism nihilations. At the base layer, violence’s endorphins voltoverloads visceral fragility to gamify mass trauma into war Baudrillard slash Land guerilla sneerery, nods at airmen strapped into headsets guiding Reaper drones over flickering white dots on a target screen, but overdosed thrashes of tone destabilizes the predetermined arc into pop cyberpunk. We get all of the same places: salvaged posthuman wardead one with the machine: “We’re turning the tide. Tran, Nelson, Olivieri, they went back already. And they’re stronger than ever. They’re not in a tank, they are the tank. You’re the only one missing. You’re the only one who hasn’t decided.” But the road there whips to your left and you’re like what: “I had wanted my tattoo to read kill kill kill in Arabic. I wanted to look hard, I wanted to feel scary, I wanted even my blown-off limbs to look threatening. But the guy who gave it to me was high and wrote mellon a bunch of times in Tengwar, a script invented by an English professor named John Ronald Reuel Tolkien.” This is a silly joke which nearly overplays its fictional coherence to jim the camera, but writing out the full JRR is such an inspired omniincredulity that the missile glistens sleek.
The fundamental paradox of antiwar art is that war thrives on spectacle, cf. Baudrillard on Apocalypse Now and Vietnam. The uncanny juxtaposition between meaningless video game ultraviolence and the irrevocable atrocities of murder missionaries rings hollower than its selfsatisfied confrontive since nothing’s really been juxtaed, and when Wayfarers plays its purpose straight, we walk blithely into these landmines: “The start of each mission presented a fresh grudge and a fresh hatred. Any truce was brittle, shattering on the hard, hard land. I died, but so what? When I came back, I killed. I used my rifle, grenades, broken bottles, flamethrowers, my carbon steel knife. / Forever War let you get creative. I hacked up the bodies of the dead. I dragged them into the street. I let the Humvees from our convoy run them over. Jackson, Olivieri, Nelson, Tran. These were my dead, and I wanted revenge. And I got it, again and again, until I was bored.” But before you’re also bored by respawn cycle looping of animating tropes, Wayfarers hits you with something totally wild like “But my dad, despite being a descendant of border-crossers, used to follow around anyone speaking Spanish in the grocery store and yell, “ICE!” so he could broadcast their reactions on his prank stream.” Disorienting inward crunches recast the carbonsteel certainties of cybernetic wardread from massproduced materiel like “They found ways to mesh slivers of humanity with the new arsenal” to staticshock screams over the radio: “How small a scrap of human would I have needed to be, to be allowed to die?”
Thus the genius of the jostling tone, its frenetic signal switcher swamping quadrature pulses feverish dizzied into painkiller fuzz: “I felt a full-body throb, a phantom pain. / I wanted meds, painkillers, something to knock me out or put the pain away, to make me feel like I wasn’t dying. / Suddenly I could sense the muffled enclosure of the gauze and the pricks of this user interface against my scalp. I felt an ocean of things around me, liquids, plastics, an oozing and squishiness that was nothing like muscle or bone. I didn’t want to know or understand it. I didn’t want to know what had become of me.” Whenever we’re lockstepped into the moral charge of the militation subversion, odd splotches of humor hint at a dawdling humanity too oozily vulnerable to fit the suiting up to purpose: “And she was broken, too. On the way to our absent father’s study, we took a brief tour of our virtual home. She walked into walls, knocked into family portraits, and after she discovered a letter-opener on the desk, insisted on stabbing a locked drawer when we needed to find the key.” It’s funny, but also not quite, white noise bubbles the back of your skull, at any moment tragedy could electricate your morphine veins, tragedies less obvious, less opprobrially imperial: ““You should have stayed human,” my sister had begged, as if humanity had so much going for it. All I had known was fear and loss and helplessness.” Not really jokes jumpstart narrative gestures into awkward halters forward for jitters on the EKG punching the line through porous emotives: “Kaemi: why is this even a two-player game? / ADA: should i have died instead? / Kaemi: i didn’t say that”
Wayfarers never develops this coughkilter into subtlety, rather it speaks in highlighter: “There is a story about the Ship of Theseus. After he saved the children from a labyrinth not unlike the one in which we now find ourselves, the great hero gifted his ship to his people” paralleling the salvaged seeking freedom from ancestral legacies lingering like predestination in “Now, one-handed, I slit Ozymandias’s throat. Then I rolled onto him and held him down. He bled. And bled. His body thrashed beneath me like a ship breaking on the rocks. I held on instinctively.” You get it? No? Let’s try again! “The forever war was about revenge, but against who? All our enemies were dead. We were fighting their children’s children. We were fighting against our parents’ and grandparents’ decisions. We could never stand up against the people who raised us, so we droned the people across the sea.” You get it? No? Let’s try again! “Our ancestors fired the first bullets. They cut the first throats. / Then they handed that violence down to their children. / And to their grandchildren. / Now here I am, their legacy, trying to put their pieces, and mine, back together.” Cybernetic salvaging serves, well as for itself aesthetics sure, but also broadly as a metaphor for the sins we inherit seeding the values we reenact as circuitries of violence looping the electrical charge that orders us to the society we arise within mechanisms grinding and granding up in scale to the ravages wreaked like frequencies across the world by this complex industrialized. Oscillation between complicity with atrocity and escapisms that steadystate doses our complacencies: “Ada and I never turned down an adventure. We could not. We had learned there was nowhere else for us to go.” There’s of course truth here, but I’m not so sure it’s explicated in any enlightening way by “It was the first time I had seen red blood in this game. Up until now, our enemies had dissipated into coils of gray smoke.”
Instead, all the little pinpricks in this inevitability waked from the tonespikes shine in expressive hues to cherish here, tiny bright pops genuinely hopeful that ends don’t encapsulate the journey: “Even if it meant I only had one more play-through. One more chance to land on that beach under that star-studded dawn. Another chance to share a memory. If we could escape the war, even for a little while, that would be a victory.” Because any falseness of our agency doesn’t dissipate us, of any illusion a still experienced: “I reminded myself that we were characters. None of this was real. Even if it was beautiful. / She closed her eyes and smiled, as if she could feel the wind that carried us. / I wondered what was inside her head, who was falling into this world with me.” In the tenuousness of that experience, aren’t you alive, isn’t there every elsewhere intensity in where we are else? “Then she—it—the avatar—the game—reached for my hand, and a feeling came over me, as if we still had bodies to share.” Such a dream enlivens our resistance ohms, the charge instilled in our frictive to encircuit the fray, fuel through the destructive fires any plume that signals at least the grasping for transcendence, the trusting in where we cannot reach, “a future where life was precious, where every day was a series of cherished moments. How could such a place be possible? He had no further clues for us.” Perhaps we will find it, together, whomever we can encompass in the fragile word.
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Thank you for the review, kaemi! I wasn’t sure if it was appropriate for me to comment on this thread, but I just want to say, thank you so much for taking the time to play my game and share your thoughts. I read your review quite a few times and l appreciate it!
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Portrait with Wolf by Drew Cook
Selfaggressive collapse deferred, in Repeat the Ending, by metaslips layering baroque are beaten back flat by Portrait with Wolf’s drumbeat brutalizer, collapsuling your airless in ever yet “Another ending to repeat.” Every choice shunted into atomized dissonance returns you to the nowhere from whom you’ve carved shelter, darkness as “possibility. It is important to remain still so that you don’t trip over—or into—anything. / When the lights come up, you are left with the default.” Remain here screams the recoil from each sensation, sneering omnipresence of exposed nerves jittery to jumpstart sparks to blackout on the floor breathing nowhere, nowhere, “The less you look, the better it feels.” Analgesis craving for the less of lifeless, entomb bonecrisp of the cold a cavity’s cavein, but that only means “Your happiness: / held still / held by the earth”. You will, tomorrow, still be held by the earth? Yes? Yes? “The dark and the silence. They seem to go on forever. At any moment, you could become unmoored, just fall into it and fall forever. You could fall into the dark but never fall out. And it’s so quiet. If you couldn’t hear your own heart, would you even exist? Just imagine, falling forever, tumbling into nothing, just absence forever. / Something shifts: a different kind of nothing on the stairs.”
Panic from the nothing as it rears Nothing bursts us through anxious fragment fulminations against which the parser structure pressurizes back to selfcollapse with acerbs of “I hope you aren’t crying again.” These fragments sparkle, through splinter emotives, the totality we antagonize protistor. Between embers and their ashy windswipeds we mourn the lack of an inside burning: “Family consumed by a doom of rats, crashing in waves. Lattices of fungi rustling within a book lung.” We’re promised tomorrow will come, and maybe this is the only dream he has truly believed, even as whatever he imagines would happen doesn’t happen and this doesn’t happening becomes a habit, because tomorrow is still a promise, persisting in its delustory “untreated for a while, to get away with all that there was to get away with”, til it’s all away but we’re still here waiting: “Wait there, by the window. Wait. There’s no reaching the door, you know that. Wait. There is something large and hot on your chest, and your breath must squeeze through your cracked center. Wait there. Good. Wait.” Drowning jolt of, no, why would you not wait, where could you get going? “What do you see there, beyond the window? Other windows.” So you wait, tomorrow will come, and so “The problem of your thingness / goes unsolved”.
If, after all, “We give up on luck / the way we give up on love / long after it ends”, then how surprised we will be when tomorrow comes, with it its disasters. The voidaverse admit what we’ve become, diminish wisher, and the loves, the not so innocent and why the innocent, thrum with irreversibility guilt, even if you fight your way out of this hole you’ll never recover those abandoned on the surface: “While you were falling forever, your parents got old. The cat got old. You were preserved by the cold, not enough ox to oxidize, a cut apple forever fresh. Tart suspended in sweet. Damp noise behind a bite.” Freezing stasis of stored beneath time, you were not a shelter, at least not the one for the ones trusting, so abashed escape into the nulla, start the ending finally, you’re not so sure why a tomorrow should come, why run when the quicksand acts faster: “The ground is too soft to stand on, and it is too hard to get out of.” Enough of envy, let go of the sky, lower the lid and spasm wildly for air: “Even as panic crashed through you, the world sang blandly on: far away cars, birds, pine needles combing a light wind. / How long were you there? Fear is a dead star’s weight, pulling and flattening time, and even if it ends, it is never over.”
Because there is some body out there waiting for us to inhabit its instillations? Even if it’s not a tomorrow, a terminal in which to wait, savor, spool out an unthreaded trust of this needling: “Isn’t it time to move on, to forgive yourself and move on? There is so much joy in life: the park in late September, a fresh muffin from the corner bakery, the short week before the grievy vacancy of the hardwoods settles. / That belongs to somebody else. It isn’t yours. You will always be back, or on your way back. You only leave to come back.” Why should it belong to somebody else? What else would an else be but this choice otherwise? Even chthonic the catalepsis structures a defiance of will: “Anything—a car door, a faraway dog, a train whistle traveling far over still air—you are its only witness! These experiences belong to you, they are yours, and someone would have to tunnel through your organs to reach them.” Experiential espermutor of the echo, in here is an in here the pressures can contract but never counteract: “You are places in the earth. You are a place in the dark. / You are a hearing, and a sound is only its hearing.” Song of the lost voices is as sufficiency of the afterlife available to you, erasure is only temporary composure of a nothingness yet to give: “A room blanching in white light. The rest is fascination.” The lifechoice then to glorious whatsowhether.
“Is this it? Have you made it?” The fragments, as often they’re wont, don’t fully realize the feeling that follows. In this respect perhaps Repeat the Ending is, by virtue of a greater ambition, also a greater optimist. But what do you want, the world? “This city: a cool vividness, a printer’s tray of cherishments. A baffling insufficiency.”
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what a lovely review. thank you very much for spending time with my work.
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I don’t know why, but this particular phrase is ringing in my brain and will not stop. Lol, amazing.
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Social Democracy: Petrograd 1917 by Autumn Chen
The Duma was formed after a great massacre: the embittered Tsar wanted to see if we could do it better. Now that a catastrophic world war has annihilated our countrymen on an unprecedented scale, we’ve demonstrably proven we can do it better, so the Tsar is deposed.
Now the question of awkwardly reorganizing our state affairs, given that the Tsar can no longer be blamed for them. There are several areas of concern. First, of course, the catastrophic world war annihilating our countrymen on an unprecedented scale. The soldiers are complaining, which only shows they were not the soldiers who should have been complaining. We must give them something, I suppose, since we’re running out of rifles. What are the proposals? “There will be elected soldiers’ committees, which will control the distribution of weapons.” This will be a disaster. The army will collapse if the distribution of weapons is the decision of those who discharge them. Soon, they’ll be demanding control of the distribution of orders! What happened to the patriotic old days, when you told such and so a village, go forth into their main column and all of you die, so the cavalry can achieve a victory? These revolutionaries profess they believe in collective action, yet not one of them is willing to join the great unifying slaughter in No Man’s Land. “Soldiers can no longer be verbally abused by the officers, and they must be addressed by respectful terms.” This will be a disaster. The utter indignity of politely being asked your opinion regarding the upkeep of the latrine. Aleksander Ivanych, please dear heart, you know that by every hair of my moustache I am fond of your kisses, could you please beloved one crawl like a worm rooting round hell under mortars and machine guns through the mud and wire and corpses, and should you then still breathe, launch yourself into their nest with this grenade? “Soldiers will have the same rights as ordinary citizens when off-duty, including the right to participate in elections.” Yes, of course, this is fine. Soldiers ought to be guaranteed every right that should pertain to when they are no longer soldiers, we all take immense solace in the afterlife.
Now onto labor. The people are convinced they’ve seized power, so we must convince them of this. “Support the strikes rhetorically.” This will be a disaster. For workers to have rights, they must first become workers. We will never emancipate the proletariat if there is no lower class to emancipate. “The Soviet should support the workers’ demands for higher wages and improved working conditions.” This will be a disaster. The wages are fine, of course, every year we will raise everyone’s wages by precisely the increase in prices, so the Soviet will become a champion of economic progress, dramatically increasing the supply of rubles. It is rather the improved working conditions that are intolerable, because these cannot be increased universally, but only through individualist seizures of collectivist efficiencies into petit demesnes of production according to one’s own rights. Improving working conditions is a counterrevolutionary subversion of dialectical materialism, which states that material conditions can only improve by improvements to the material of conditions, and it is this material foundation which we must improve to improve conditions, which is in fact the Soviet, so that we must all expend our patriotic energies to the utmost to improve the Soviet, which is identical to the improvement in working conditions. “The Soviet should convince the workers to stop striking.” This will be a disaster. Any dialogue between the Soviet and the workers would imply a separation between the Soviet and the workers, which is not the case. It is the radical embodiment of the Soviet that is the strike as dialectic, such that we, as workers, must radically, through the power of our Soviet, collectively empower ourselves to proceed beyond the strike towards our goal, which has already been achieved, as indeed it is through our collectivization of the means of production that we’ve realized our greatest advancement in labor: “Give women equal legal rights to men.” Now we may all victoriously return to the factories.
Finally, the most pressing matter. Now that the Tsar is gone, who is to blame? The easiest answer: “The only enemies should be the Germans!” This will be a disaster. If our only enemies are the Germans, then we will have to win the war, which is impossible, then who do we blame for that? “The Kadets and other bourgeois parties.” This will be a disaster. If we declare the bourgeois to be the eternal enemy of our revolution, then yes, we can kill the Kadets and the like, but then we must blame the bourgeois, and who then is the bourgeois? Fine, they are all killed, but then who is the bourgeois? We must learn from Robespierre. “Counterrevolutionary forces, Black Hundreds, and the like.” This will be a disaster. These revolutionaries grow in the thousands, and they’re each compelled to some kind of creed. We’ll have to inquisitate every heresy every time, which will only expose the damned to options. We’ll allocate our precious resources endlessly explaining which revolution is the revolution that properly revolves, by the very thought I’ve become dizzy. “Bolsheviks and anarchists, who seek to subvert the revolution from within.” Excellent, only when we can blame the revolutionaries will the revolution truly go unquestioned.
The situation settles nicely. We flatly refuse to join the government: first the Provisional Government, then we storm out of the Soviet. We flatly refuse to allow any ideological resolution among the SRs. We allow conditions to develop nicely: a quarter of a million die in the latest offensive, the workers and peasants are in constant revolt, the economy is collapsing. The only effort we make in response to the prevailing distress is to organize among the peasants and crack down on all the black markets supplying the cities with food. The situation deteriorates. General Kornilov besieges Petrograd to stage a coup, we flatly refuse to assist in the defense. “The war continues unabated. / Over the course of the war and revolution, the problem of hunger has worsened.” Russia enters another civil war. Chaos reigns under heaven, the situation is excellent.
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