The Domovoi

Good writing in this new Twine piece IMO:

bravemule.com/storage/thedomovoi.html (fixed, thanks Maga)

What do you all think of the interaction?

Your URL is slightly wrong - it should be a .html, not a .htm.

(Also, freakin’ awesome! Domovoi! I’ve been wanting to do a game with those things for years.)

I think the writing needs a final edit - comma placement, word choice, that kind of thing - but it’s generally good. The art’s employed deftly. Have to play a couple more times to see the full effect of the choices, I think.