Hi! I played through “Dolores and the Cave”, the premise was interesting. Here are my notes:
I’m injured. I need to stabalise my wounds…
stabalise = stabilize
A index finger is worth something
Chris, their name was. They had always been so kind to you.
They should be he or she, Misery knows Chris’ sex. Using “they” as a singular pronoun also sounds jarring to readers.
There should be more names given to the player during the adventure as red herrings for Misery’s identity, it’s too obvious even if one isn’t following the plot.
I hope that this is useful to you! I enjoyed your game.