This is a strong, thoughtful essay. I think it would be more powerful as a long-form blog post (or maybe one post per Part).
In the text, Norbez writes, “It’s a bit long, so I’ve broken it into segments.” But I think I agree with the subtitle, “Queer in Public: A Brief Essay.” I estimate that the whole thing is about 10,000 words. If Norbez were to publish each Part as a separate post, each post will only be a few thousand words, well within the range of a normal Medium or Tumblr blog post.
Instead of making the essay easier to read, the Twine structure makes it harder to read–harder to search, harder to quote, and above all, harder to finish.
The people who will most benefit from reading this essay are thoughtful American Christians. They have to make a big leap to even click on something called “Queer in Public: A Brief Essay.” Every click adds friction to the experience of reading. Slowing readers down, preventing them from consuming more quickly, gives readers more opportunities to quit reading and do something else.
Adding click friction can be useful in the same way that adding text delays can be useful; friction can help to build suspense. Look at this Twine poem, “walking home”. dl.dropboxusercontent.com/s/4e7 … 0home.html
But the thoughtful Christian readers who are the intended audience of this post will not be held in suspense with each turning page. I think they’ll just bail out on the essay, which is a shame, because it is a good essay.