Please, rewind me. - a short Twine game about loss

I made a short Twine game about a family dealing with loss and grief.
You can play it here.

Since English is not my first language, I’m eager to have some feedback from True Englishmen. The grammar should be correct, but is the prose any good? Do you think it can be improved?

I’m also rather dubious about the final sequence, when she’s the one asking questions; I fear the final passages may seem too sudden and disjointed.

Any kind of feedback is appreciated. Thank you in advance.[/center]

Oooh, I really like the premise here! I haven’t finished playing through it, but I’ve added it to IFDB here: