Looking for feedback - GameWarp

Hey there! I am looking for feedback for my story. It is a choose your own adventure (created in Twine) based on the history of video games. I only have the first chapter coded up - based on Pong. I realize some of the passages don’t connect properly yet, although I tried to get some of the kinks out. I figured it would be better to get feedback up front. Let me know what you think, thanks!

Since I am not entering any competition, I am OK with posting it publicly. If you go to the below link and then click “Download”, you can then play it in your browser.

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