Okay, so, I think I’ve settled on what I want to do! First, I’m gonna drop the wordcount, because judging by the reactions here at least half of the IFComp players are gonna see that and go “…huh?” I think kaemi describing it as a cultural difference seems most apt.
Anyways, I tried going More Poetic as an experiment, and ended up with this
One Christmas at Camelot in charged a strange fellow,
a giant man all green, great axe in hand,
and called out a challenge in the court of King Arthur:
"Bequeath me one blow, behead me clean,
and then,
in one day and a year,
pay your price in blood red!
Come to my chapel queer,
to kneel and lose your head!"
And, like a fool, you’ve accepted, in front of Arthur, Guinevere, and the entire court of Camelot. Backing down is not an option. Can you survive your reckless promise?
Based off the 14th century poem, Sir Gawain and the Green Knight.
which is fun, but also you can’t do italics or line breaks in the text, you can only do paragraph breaks, so it stretches the entry vertically to an annoying degree. It also centers it so heavily on the opening scene. So, I tried going very short - like, under 30 words short - and came up with:
You are Gawain, nephew of King Arthur. You’re on an unusual quest - find the Green Knight and let him behead you. Can you survive your reckless promise?
Based off the 14th century poem, Sir Gawain and the Green Knight.
Well it’s not actually under 30 words, the second line bumps it up, but the second part is less part of the blurb and more…attribution.
It does kind of suffer from the fact that the game opens before Gawain has actually made the promise, but eh, it’s fine. The other issue is that if I go with this the title becomes unmoored from the description, since this blurb mentions nothing to do with Christmas. So I’m probably going to change the title to The Temptation of Sir Gawain if I’m going for a exactly what it says on the tin vibe.
e: I just played around with the text, and I realized if I delete everything under the “lose your head” line in the poetry one, and move the “Based off the 14th century poem…” to the subtitle field, then the text doesn’t stick out from the bottom too much. So maybe I will use it! It’d certainly be unique, if nothing else. I’ve gone ahead and slapped portions of the poem in the game itself, so it’d be at least consistent with that…